Research Report: feedback from Ross

My introduction was rushed. Due to poor time management (again) I had made minimal effort with it. Therefore I wasn't surprised about the feedback, I was expecting it. However I was quickly motivated to get a move on with the research report when the other two students got great feedback and one had next to nothing to change. I felt embarrassed, you could say, as I had let myself down and know that I do it every time. Why does it take me to points like this for me to realise? One day I will be that person... However it wasn't all bad feedback.

The opening paragraph to my introduction had no relevance to the topic of the research report. It was just pure ramble. I hadn't made it clear what the key points of the essay were or the focus. Since then I have made amends and approached it by going straight in about the topic and what I know about it. Only briefly though because I was then going to expand it within the following chapter. 

Besides the awful opening paragraph the structure of the essay looked good to Ross. Apart from the change of words within the text he said that was fine. I needed to elaborate on each paragraph about the chapters within the essay as they were looking really bare and uninteresting. 

Originally I wanted to talk about the function of the photograph and how the photograph can be therapeutic. Within the introduction I spoke a lot about grief and subjectivity. In the feedback it said the title is misleading because I hadn't explained enough about the title. When I began my first draft of the essay I realised that I actually wanted to talk about grief in photography and how it can be therapeutic for individuals who are suffering. 

As I write this post my research report is completed and submitted ready for hand in tomorrow. I don't mind writing but I get very frustrated with myself because I am crap at writing. I end up making my sentences a paragraph long because I don't know how to use punctuation. But after the embarrassment of sitting there with a crappy introduction whilst the other two had done so well with theirs within the feedback tutorial it motivated me to do better and get started with the essay ASAP. I was still working on it at least a day before hand in but I would definitely say that I put my full effort into it. To the point that I almost cried because my brain had gone completely blank from taking in too much information in one day. I have never spent so long on a written piece of work. I made sure that I checked through the writing several times and made any changes that I thought didn't need to be in there or if I had any new input. After all the stress I actually enjoyed writing it. It showed me that I can do well when I put my mind to it. But it also showed how much interest I have in the topic and its massive influence in my work. Being able to write about something you enjoy becomes a little bit easier which I am so glad I chose to write about the topic and bringing myself into it with my personal experiences. I could write about my past for ages which at times I did get carried away with it which Ross noticed. He advised me to make it a separate paragraph because I had wrote about it in every paragraph almost.